User talk:Mariela Szirko/Consciousness

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This article was merged with the now deleted [[Consciousness:definition and concept]] to remove the colon from the title. The edit history of that article can be found in the history of this article, but it's text was then replaced by the text that is currently at this location. It can be found at this point in the history in the case that someone wants to incorporate it into this article. D. Matt Innis 01:51, 20 August 2009 (UTC)


Removal

Removal suggested by Anthony Sebastian, October 27, 2011

Editorial Council: Case 2011-005

Opened: --Peter Schmitt 23:45, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
Closed: Removed to user space. --Peter Schmitt 00:16, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

Comments

(a) the comprehensibility of the narrative, and related, its pedagogic quality, including clarity, coherence of narrative flow, adequacy of number and appropriateness of citations,

(b) the appropriateness of the article’s title in relation to topic of the article’s content, and,

(c) the appropriateness of the article in relation to the mainstream concepts and definitions of ‘consciousness’ as articulated by the leading scholars in the field of consciousness studies.

REMARK-01: The proposer suspects that the author writes in English as a second language. Nevertheless, the quality of the article should meet the standards of a well-written article in English.

REMARK-02: In respect of item (c), minimally see the articles entitled consciousness in the Encyclopedia Britannica Online (EOB 'Consciousness'), the Stanford Encyclopedia of Philosophy SEP article 'Consciousness'), and books entitled ‘consciousness’ in a Google Books search: e.g., Rosenthal - Consciousness and Mind; Zeman - Consciousness: A Users Guide; Cambridge Handbook of Consciousness; Blackmore (ed.) - Conversations on Consciousness.

Initial comments by Anthony Sebastian.

Below, the links to the four Google Books named as examples in the proposal:

Rosenthal

Zeman

Cambridge

Blackmore   Anthony.Sebastian 01:00, 28 October 2011 (GMT)

I have just glanced at the lede paragraph, and it is the single worst paragraph I have ever read at CZ, which is saying a lot! On that basis alone, the entire article should be blanked. Hayford Peirce 00:55, 28 October 2011 (GMT)

Above comments copied from EC:2011-040.

Please note that the history hides a second article: Consciousness:definition and concept. --Peter Schmitt 00:29, 30 October 2011 (UTC)
This article requires a complete rewrite. If there is anything valuable in it, it is so well concealed as to make it useless as an aid to revision. So it should be deleted until a volunteer appears to do a new one. John R. Brews 00:35, 30 October 2011 (UTC)
After attempting to read and understand both articles I have come to the conclusion that they are not suitable as articles on "Conciousness" (at least, in their current form):
  • They make no attempt to explain their topic to a broader uninitiated readership but are written (probably by a specialist) in language that may, at most, make sense only to narrow specialists.
  • They seem to present only an idiosyncratic Argentinian view of the field.
Therefore I suggest to move the articles to their author's userspace. --Peter Schmitt 00:14, 1 November 2011 (UTC)