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I put my references on using the automated reference wikification but it looks a bit crazy and I don't think it's right. Sorry! I don't know how to do it though! [[User:Laura Sinclair|Laura Sinclair]] 13:46, 9 October 2010 (UTC) | |||
:Hey, you did fine: all the blue elements you can now click on to link through, and the refs are in a very easy form to copy and paste into the main article. Good job.[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 15:08, 9 October 2010 (UTC) | |||
==Related articles== | |||
You'll see that on the Related articles subpage I've placed links to all the articles from the other groups this year - and also to last year's articles. .[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 16:00, 9 October 2010 (UTC) | |||
Noting some good work here and some nice, fluent writing. When you edit, it's a good idea to read each sentence aloud; look at this "Since the early twentieth century, there has thought to have been a link between blood glucose and appetite." | |||
You'll notice that it reads as though there's only been a link since the early 20th century. Presumambly there's always been that link, it's just only been recognised since then. OK, this sounds picky - but good writing is about getting the meaning across clearly and quickly. If the reader has to "double-take", that slows him (or her) down, and that's not good.[[User:Gareth Leng|Gareth Leng]] 14:59, 25 October 2010 (UTC) | |||
I agree that what has been written so far reads well. Laura G, Ellen, are you ready to add to the main article? [[User:John Menzies|John Menzies]] 14:37, 27 October 2010 (UTC) | |||
Latest revision as of 08:37, 27 October 2010
- Laura Goodlet 13:15, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
- Ellen Eun Hyun Kim 13:18, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
- Laura Sinclair 13:19, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
- Ayano Miyashita 13:51, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
I put my references on using the automated reference wikification but it looks a bit crazy and I don't think it's right. Sorry! I don't know how to do it though! Laura Sinclair 13:46, 9 October 2010 (UTC)
- Hey, you did fine: all the blue elements you can now click on to link through, and the refs are in a very easy form to copy and paste into the main article. Good job.Gareth Leng 15:08, 9 October 2010 (UTC)
Related articles
You'll see that on the Related articles subpage I've placed links to all the articles from the other groups this year - and also to last year's articles. .Gareth Leng 16:00, 9 October 2010 (UTC)
Noting some good work here and some nice, fluent writing. When you edit, it's a good idea to read each sentence aloud; look at this "Since the early twentieth century, there has thought to have been a link between blood glucose and appetite."
You'll notice that it reads as though there's only been a link since the early 20th century. Presumambly there's always been that link, it's just only been recognised since then. OK, this sounds picky - but good writing is about getting the meaning across clearly and quickly. If the reader has to "double-take", that slows him (or her) down, and that's not good.Gareth Leng 14:59, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
I agree that what has been written so far reads well. Laura G, Ellen, are you ready to add to the main article? John Menzies 14:37, 27 October 2010 (UTC)