Talk:Glucostatic theory of appetite control

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 Definition The theory that changes in blood glucose concentrations or arteriovenous glucose differences are detected by glucoreceptors that affect energy intake. [d] [e]
  1. Laura Goodlet 13:15, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
  2. Ellen Eun Hyun Kim 13:18, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
  3. Laura Sinclair 13:19, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
  4. Ayano Miyashita 13:51, 28 September 2010 (UTC)

I put my references on using the automated reference wikification but it looks a bit crazy and I don't think it's right. Sorry! I don't know how to do it though! Laura Sinclair 13:46, 9 October 2010 (UTC)

Hey, you did fine: all the blue elements you can now click on to link through, and the refs are in a very easy form to copy and paste into the main article. Good job.Gareth Leng 15:08, 9 October 2010 (UTC)

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You'll see that on the Related articles subpage I've placed links to all the articles from the other groups this year - and also to last year's articles. .Gareth Leng 16:00, 9 October 2010 (UTC)

Noting some good work here and some nice, fluent writing. When you edit, it's a good idea to read each sentence aloud; look at this "Since the early twentieth century, there has thought to have been a link between blood glucose and appetite."

You'll notice that it reads as though there's only been a link since the early 20th century. Presumambly there's always been that link, it's just only been recognised since then. OK, this sounds picky - but good writing is about getting the meaning across clearly and quickly. If the reader has to "double-take", that slows him (or her) down, and that's not good.Gareth Leng 14:59, 25 October 2010 (UTC)

I agree that what has been written so far reads well. Laura G, Ellen, are you ready to add to the main article? John Menzies 14:37, 27 October 2010 (UTC)